Voice of a distant star (part one)

 (Before I tell this story, I would like to say that I can’t take full credit for the work. If anything, I can only take credit for 25% of it. Everything else was from something I saw a few nights ago, and I wanted to put it into text form. I give all the credit to Makoto Shinkai. I hope that you all enjoy the story.)

She said, “I’m going to be up there someday.” With those words someday came in a blink of an eye, and she was up there, just like she said she would be.  She is now flying around in the tracer on a daily training mission looking for her target, and without warning, her target appears shooting at her. She moves out of the way, missing the target’s fire.    She says, “There you are!” and fires off an onslaught of missiles at the target, but misses, and without a second notice she comes back shouting, “Come on!” and this time hits her target….

her:
Dear Vincent, On Mars it was none stop training, these ships are massive, and it is so hard to learn everything that controls them, and I used to bitch about my sword in Kendo class, but you know me. I’m top in my group. The sight seen here is fantastic. It so strange seeing these things in real life. you can take a picture of something and it never does it justice. I think about that sometime, when i see a picture of you. The Tarstion kill everyone in the first survey unite here, but we manage to retrieve some of their own technology, it may give us the edge we need.

The Lausitheu is amazing, home to me now. By the time you read this Mars will be just a memory. Were at Jupiter now. My god the clouds, but the fluxes tub between Io and Jupiter, you have to see it to believe it

On a sunny afternoon, he falls fast asleep with his cell phone in hand. Suddenly, his phone rings with a new text message, waking him up as if it was a sign of life. He reads the message from the woman he holds dear to himself.

him:
It’s her. She was a friend of mine in school, I though we would be together later but, well things change. She on Jupiter now, army. and me I’d bombed the Self Defence Force. looks like vocational school for me. I don’t have a job, don’t have a goal. She was always so strong, and I was strong when I was with her. Now I’m weak, two of her messages arrive, then I get weaker.

her:
Finally leaving Jupiter, you know these messages are being monitor, and our final destination is classified, so listen it will take longer…

him:
…and longer for these messages to reach you, and this one should take, what half a year still…

her:
…call me, I know this 20th century air mail isn’t perfect, but it’s all we got.

him:
Two semesters down, and still no word, and everyday it’s the same thing* he checks his phone for a new message but hears only ” you have no messages” Everyday I make a vale, don’t check today, just wait a day or two then check. * a few days has pass and as he checks his phone he still get “you have no messages” Everyday the same message… no message

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~ by Rio K. on September 23, 2009.

4 Responses to “Voice of a distant star (part one)”

  1. Rio, I love this. I could feel the sadness of ‘no message.’ Keep writing and don’t make me wait so long! =)

    • Joonie, I’m happy that you like what I’m trying to put together , but all good things come to those that wait, so don’t be so bossy :P but I’ll try not to make you wait too long for part two ;) thanx again for taking the time to read this & the feed back (hugs)

  2. Makoto Shinkai has done a great job with this story, my compliments to her/him and 25% to you as well. Can’t wait for Part Two. Its taken a while and so it must be really good as you said. (lol)

  3. I’m happy that you enjoyed part one I’ve been working on part two for a little bit but it should be up soon.

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